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Sitting, dim, by a bright yellow
lamp, next to greasy blue
walls, My heart's room is closed
to the cold.

The door is latched,
There are no lights,
And you are locked inside.

One two Three
days go by. Then Weeks.
You keep time by scaring
/ into me. Drawing X's over
my eyes, and O O O if only there was
the tiniest hole, you could scratch
scratch.
scratch.

There are none.

There is only room in my small heart for one.

And even now, when
I press one hand to my chest
I feel you banging.
THUMP...

THUMP...

THUMP...
You are still there.
Your fingertips leaving
streaks on the window.
:iconkhrishna:
Aphrodite's Darker Face
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:iconbarely-legal:
This is just

pure

raw

talent

at its very best. :+favlove:

Your poetry paints a picture on a blank canvas, and for every person that reads it, the picture is different. That's why your poetry is so freakin' damn goood!!
It truly is amazing.

So here is some :sushi: and an :orange: [orange sushi, anyone?] for you to munch on while you spill your brain onto some paper and create another amazing poem [about orange sushi].

Kerry.
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:iconkhrishna:
=)....thank you really does not cover that one. ....so


:chainsaw::aww: ..there...

the blood should cover it.=)
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:iconfailedwings:
i. love. this. poem. just letting you know.
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:iconolivemonkies:
:) it's very well written, gives visuals. not many poems give you visuals for the readers. i like it quite a lot... you're a good writer
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:iconkhrishna:
i'm not really good.
but
I always thought
peoms that were really
just written tiraids
are sort of boring.

i'd rather make something
that most people find meaningless
but that is more like a painting
writen in words.

thus i tend to lean towards images
rather than
just plain out saying something.

=)
thank you for such a lovely comment.
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:iconmycheaptrick:
Wow, my comment did come up! And I managed to mention the sun twice! Yeah sorry.
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:iconkhrishna:
haha:D

i hate it when that happens

but i got to read clones of your lovely comment
twice
and now
the sun is shining brighter here.

[and i am hiding from it]

but yes=)
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:iconmycheaptrick:
I don't know if my comment showed up. Damn 'puter. Anyway, this is beautiful! Like the sun, when it's not.. all bright and stuff.
It makes me stop, and read it over, and the imagery is wonderful as well. Verrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrrrrrrrrrrrry well written, and very.. macabre, in a purdy sort of way. Much lurve!
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:iconmycheaptrick:
Beautiful! Like the.. sun..
when it's, you know, not all.. shiney and in everyone's faces
and hair.
Really though, I like this. Kind've symbolic in a way..
reminds me offf.. sad things, my mommy, and crank.

... yes. >.< But it's beautiful nonetheless! And very well written. Makes me want to read it again and again.
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