i will meet you
at Lehr's Motel
under the motel sign,
"hot water
cold running
air conditioned tv."
we will dress as ravens wings,
stand fiingertip to fingertip,
and blow away,
words floating off a page,
our feet dangling in sky.
i will meet you
after we have drifted
like two dandilions lifted
among Ten thousand more bronze seeds
dry twisting in a breeze,
each scrambling for sweet earth
each holding dreamlessness.
They blossom into boredom
to sip the last drops of rain.
hacking up green plegm
biting their leaves,
and blaming aphids.
cracking their stems,
into withered spines.
no honey bee makes love to them.
They suffocate for sunshine.
"dress in the dollar bill
curl up with the dollar bill
roll up the dollar bill
choke on the dollar bill."
i will meet you
in the cornfield,
over Verizon's billboard
"cheap high
speed connection."
We will shatter there.
To break the bars of geometry
of biology
of cosmology
of sunrise.
under bitter sky
among ten thousand hungry ears,
dew-filled and curled like
twisted tawny tounges.
We're wasted seeds
dropping like bombs black as ravens wings.
are the Criminal with Such Grace
This is a night so beautiful that I think Bacchus gave it to me. Irish whiskey, brilliant amateur poetry...now it's time to enjoy the world around me with an unfiltered Pall Mall
he and i have that sort of relationship.
the kind where i find myself waking up on the kitchen floor
and not knowing how i got there.
bacchus must indeed be proud.
in the first and last stanza ravens should be raven's
and you've got a typo in the first 'fingertip'
in the second stanza
dandilions should be dandelions
in the third stanza
plegm should be phlegm
now that that's out of the way..
there's something about those references to motel signs and billboards.. i can't exactly put my finger on it.. i think it's the combination of what seems like this tragic romance and these symbols of modern life.. it creates such a vivid atmosphere.
it's been said but its worth repeating... it's good reading you again.
and juxtaposition in the poem that they might
give it a little solid ground to stand on. i'm glad they did their job.
thank you.
ah, and thank you for pointing out those errors too.
"plegm" ...
thanks again though.
STOP INSPIRING ME DAMMIT.
(great job, seriously. Now come to belgium.)
i hear and obey, master.
thank you!:anger:
and the fave.
i think it
s
by far as
nice as you say but
i never dispute such
graciousness and i'm happy
you enjoyed it.